installation: iso: improve & align wording with pmg-docs

New paragraphs were taken from pmg-docs and adapted. Most changes
here are the result of basically "diffing" both documentations, choosing
the better prased/sounding sections. Some wording were slightly changed
as necessary to further improve them.

The equivalent changes will be done for pmg-docs too, to ensure they are
really the same in the end.

Signed-off-by: Christoph Heiss <c.heiss@proxmox.com>

diff --git a/pve-installation.adoc b/pve-installation.adoc
index 6b44fc0b678a21fd0aaf2756d3cdb24d702548f8..cba3b5895b2f64475f94e4da414dbccf05c58bd9 100644 (file)
--- a/pve-installation.adoc
+++ b/pve-installation.adoc
@@ -43,7 +43,7 @@ The installer ISO image includes the following:
 * Complete operating system (Debian Linux, 64-bit)
 
 * The {pve} installer, which partitions the local disk(s) with ext4, XFS,
 * Complete operating system (Debian Linux, 64-bit)
 
 * The {pve} installer, which partitions the local disk(s) with ext4, XFS,

-  BTRFS (technology preview), or ZFS and installs the operating system.
+  BTRFS (technology preview), or ZFS and installs the operating system

 
 * {pve} Linux kernel with KVM and LXC support
 
 
 * {pve} Linux kernel with KVM and LXC support
 


@@ -52,9 +52,9 @@ The installer ISO image includes the following:
 
 * Web-based management interface
 
 
 * Web-based management interface
 

-NOTE: All existing data on the for installation selected drives will be removed
-during the installation process. The installer does not add boot menu entries
-for other operating systems.
+NOTE: All existing data on the selected drives will be removed during the
+installation process. The installer does not add boot menu entries for other
+operating systems.

 
 Please insert the xref:installation_prepare_media[prepared installation media]
 (for example, USB flash drive or CD-ROM) and boot from it.
 
 Please insert the xref:installation_prepare_media[prepared installation media]
 (for example, USB flash drive or CD-ROM) and boot from it.


@@ -65,8 +65,8 @@ when booting an installer prior to {pve} version 8.1.
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-grub-menu.png"]
 
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-grub-menu.png"]
 

-After choosing the correct entry (e.g. Boot from USB) the {pve} menu will be
-displayed and one of the following options can be selected:
+After choosing the correct entry (for example, 'Boot from USB') the {pve} menu
+will be displayed, and one of the following options can be selected:

 
 Install {pve} (Graphical)::
 
 
 Install {pve} (Graphical)::
 


@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ from the respective button. For example, `ALT + N` to press a `Next` button.
 
 Install {pve} (Terminal UI)::
 
 
 Install {pve} (Terminal UI)::
 

-Starts the console-mode installation wizard. It provides the same overall
+Starts the terminal-mode installation wizard. It provides the same overall

 installation experience as the graphical installer, but has generally better
 compatibility with very old and very new hardware.
 
 installation experience as the graphical installer, but has generally better
 compatibility with very old and very new hardware.
 


@@ -123,39 +123,46 @@ Runs `memtest86+`. This is useful to check if the memory is functional and free
 of errors. Secure Boot must be turned off in the UEFI firmware setup utility to
 run this option.
 
 of errors. Secure Boot must be turned off in the UEFI firmware setup utility to
 run this option.
 

+You normally select *Install {pve} (Graphical)* to start the installation.
+

 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-select-target-disk.png"]
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-select-target-disk.png"]
 

-After selecting *Install {pve}* and accepting the EULA, the prompt to select the
-target hard disk(s) will appear. The `Options` button opens the dialog to select
-the target file system.
+The first step is to read our EULA (End User License Agreement). Following this,
+you can select the target hard disk(s) for the installation.
+
+CAUTION: By default, the whole server is used and all existing data is removed.
+Make sure there is no important data on the server before proceeding with the
+installation.

 
 

-The default file system is `ext4`. The Logical Volume Manager (LVM) is used when
-`ext4` or `xfs` is selected. Additional options to restrict LVM space
-can also be set (see <<advanced_lvm_options,below>>).
+The `Options` button lets you select the target file system, which
+defaults to `ext4`. The installer uses LVM if you select
+`ext4` or `xfs` as a file system, and offers additional options to
+restrict LVM space (see xref:advanced_lvm_options[below]).

 
 

-{pve} can be installed on ZFS. As ZFS offers several software RAID levels, this
-is an option for systems that don't have a hardware RAID controller. The target
-disks must be selected in the `Options` dialog. More ZFS specific settings can
-be changed under `Advanced Options` (see <<advanced_zfs_options,below>>).
+{pve} can also be installed on ZFS. As ZFS offers several software RAID levels,
+this is an option for systems that don't have a hardware RAID controller. The
+target disks must be selected in the `Options` dialog. More ZFS specific
+settings can be changed under xref:advanced_zfs_options[`Advanced Options`].

 
 WARNING: ZFS on top of any hardware RAID is not supported and can result in data
 loss.
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-select-location.png", float="left"]
 
 
 WARNING: ZFS on top of any hardware RAID is not supported and can result in data
 loss.
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-select-location.png", float="left"]
 

-The next page asks for basic configuration options like the location, the time
-zone, and keyboard layout. The location is used to select a download server
-close by to speed up updates. The installer usually auto-detects these settings.
-They only need to be changed in the rare case that auto detection fails or a
-different keyboard layout should be used.
+The next page asks for basic configuration options like your location, time
+zone, and keyboard layout. The location is used to select a nearby download
+server, in order to increase the speed of updates. The installer is usually able
+to auto-detect these settings, so you only need to change them in rare
+situations when auto-detection fails, or when you want to use a keyboard layout
+not commonly used in your country.

 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-set-password.png"]
 
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-set-password.png"]
 

-Next the password of the superuser (root) and an email address needs to be
+Next the password of the superuser (`root`) and an email address needs to be

 specified. The password must consist of at least 5 characters. It's highly
 recommended to use a stronger password. Some guidelines are:
 
 specified. The password must consist of at least 5 characters. It's highly
 recommended to use a stronger password. Some guidelines are:
 

-- Use a minimum password length of 12 to 14 characters.
+- Use a minimum password length of at least 12 characters.

 
 - Include lowercase and uppercase alphabetic characters, numbers, and symbols.
 
 
 - Include lowercase and uppercase alphabetic characters, numbers, and symbols.
 


@@ -169,35 +176,69 @@ For example:
 
 - Information about available package updates.
 
 
 - Information about available package updates.
 

-- Error messages from periodic CRON jobs.
+- Error messages from periodic 'cron' jobs.

 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-setup-network.png"]
 
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-setup-network.png"]
 

-The last step is the network configuration. Network interfaces that are UP show
-a filled circle in front of their name in the drop down menu. Please note that
-during installation you can either use an IPv4 or IPv6 address, but not both. To
-configure a dual stack node, add additional IP addresses after the installation.
+All those notification mails will be sent to the specified email address.
+
+The last step is the network configuration. Network interfaces that are 'UP'
+show a filled circle in front of their name in the drop down menu. Please note
+that during installation you can either specify an IPv4 or IPv6 address, but not
+both. To configure a dual stack node, add additional IP addresses after the
+installation.

 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-installation.png", float="left"]
 
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-installation.png", float="left"]
 

-The next step shows a summary of the previously selected options. Re-check every
-setting and use the `Previous` button if a setting needs to be changed. To
-accept, press `Install`. The installation starts to format disks and copies
-packages to the target. Please wait until this step has finished; then remove
-the installation medium and restart your system.
+The next step shows a summary of the previously selected options. Please
+re-check every setting and use the `Previous` button if a setting needs to be
+changed.
+
+After clicking `Install`, the installer will begin to format the disks and copy
+packages to the target disk(s). Please wait until this step has finished; then
+remove the installation medium and restart your system.

 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-install-summary.png"]
 
 
 [thumbnail="screenshot/pve-install-summary.png"]
 

+Copying the packages usually takes several minutes, mostly depending on the
+speed of the installation medium and the target disk performance.
+
+When copying and setting up the packages has finished, you can reboot the
+server. This will be done automatically after a few seconds by default.
+
+.Installation Failure
+

 If the installation failed, check out specific errors on the second TTY
 If the installation failed, check out specific errors on the second TTY

-(`CTRL + ALT + F2') and ensure that the systems meets the
-xref:install_minimal_requirements[minimum requirements]. If the installation
-is still not working, look at the xref:getting_help[how to get help chapter].
+('CTRL + ALT + F2') and ensure that the systems meets the
+xref:install_minimal_requirements[minimum requirements].
+
+If the installation is still not working, look at the
+xref:getting_help[how to get help chapter].
+
+
+Accessing the Management Interface Post-Installation
+~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
+
+[thumbnail="screenshot/gui-login-window.png"]
+
+After a succesful installation and reboot of the system you can use the {pve}
+web interface for further configuration.
+
+. Point your browser to the IP address given during the installation and port
+  8006, for example: https://youripaddress:8006
+
+. Log in using the `root` (realm 'PAM') username and the password chosen during
+  installation.
+
+. Upload your subscription key to gain access to the Enterprise repository.
+  Otherwise, you will need to set up one of the public, less tested package
+  repositories to get updates for security fixes, bug fixes, and new features.
+
+. Check the IP configuration and hostname.

 
 

-Further configuration is done via the Proxmox web interface. Point your browser
-to the IP address given during installation (https://youripaddress:8006).
+. Check the timezone.

 
 

-NOTE: Default login is "root" (realm 'PAM') and the root password was defined
-during the installation process.
+. Check your xref:chapter_pve_firewall[Firewall settings].

 
 [[advanced_lvm_options]]
 Advanced LVM Configuration Options
 
 [[advanced_lvm_options]]
 Advanced LVM Configuration Options